Imagine being a old drunk and your old you really don't have anybody but yourself. Well in this case this is how a human being felt in this called " A clean well lighted place". There were so many messages in this story , about alcohol and suicide.
In this story there is a old man who went to a cafe. This man was a alcoholic he would have drink after drink. their is a old and young waiter the young waiter is a real mean person saying stuff like "You should have killed yourself lat week".poor old does not even know what he is saying because he is deaf.i think that the young waiter is so mean to the old man because he is afraid to get old , he has no courage to say it if he was not deaf.on the other hand the old man is nice to him keeping the cafe open in case someone needs it he even said.
America has 10% alcoholics . I belive that the old man was an alcoholic because he was depersted and lonly . He tryed to fill up in loneyniss with alcochol . When you drink you dont know what is going on So the old man drank becuase he flet despertate and he did not want to fell that way so he hid it with alcohol.
1 million people kill them self every year.in America . 10-20 million people kill them self worldwide. they kill them self because they don't want to be in a position that they are in, and they are deperstd .This has to relate to the old man because we wanted it kill him self if we would have done that he would have been the 10-20 million people that kill them self each year.
In this story " A clean well lighted place" has messages . It has the golden rule treat people the way you want to be treated, there is this song and the artist says "we walk the same path but have on different shoes" witch I think means you have different point of views, and personalty but you both have the same things you went thought. This relates to the old man, and the old waiter . Because the old waiter is not a probaly drunk but he knows how the old man feels to be old and most of your life is over
In paragraphs 2 and 3, you'll want to change your topic sentences. Right now the rest of your paragraph does not match the topic. Also, have someone else help you edit before you get a conference.
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